2015上海中考英語作文3例范文（附加分亮點分析）

 

　　范文1及點評：

 

　　I want to invent a flying car

 

　　It is not uncommon to meet traffic problems and serious air pollution in big city. It is a must to have a plan to improve the serious condition.

 

　　I get an idea to design my own flying machine like a car which can drive well in the street as well as fly between the high rises to avoid the traffic jam. What’s more, when it is moving ,it can transform the motion energy into electricity to drive the engine. Thus, it is possible to save a lot of fuel and reduce the air pollution. It is of great use to solve the problems of traffic jam and air pollution ,and even save the natural resource.

 

　　Bright idea can only be achieved with the determination and courage. I believe my idea will turn a new leaf of future life.

 

　　—新東方優(yōu)能中考英語左麗娜老師

 

　　精彩亮點分析：

 

　　亮點一：短語

 

　　亮點二：itisamust活用高頻詞

 

　　亮點三：定語從句描述自己設計的汽車

 

　　亮點四：短語

 

　　亮點五：beofgreatuse名詞結構更高端

 

　　亮點六：被動語態(tài)，豐富句式

 

　　亮點七：turnanewleafoffuturelife翻開未來生活的新篇章